Separate names with a comma.
Not bad. I would suggest spacing up the paragraphs or atleast if you post it here on kaw
If people read this and like it I will keep adding to this forum. To give a little synopsis of the next chapter it is in present day and you would...
Ok so lets forget about the major grammar issues you may see this isn't the purpose of me posting a sample of a story I'm writing. Feedback would...
Feed back and comments are welcomed. The Curse It’s times like these where I love to look back into my past. To think what my life would be...