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Bump. Anyone interested in me continuing this?
I also screenshot pretty much any detailed reply. Sad. I know. (").(")
Thank you to everyone who commented. Honestly, I'm a thirteen year old with little or no writing experience. I need as much feedback as I can...
And intriguing. I hate when people give away the story in their title which you avoided.
And you could give it a snappy title like "Within Him" or something and work some kind of phrase like "the force within him would lead to his...
Original. I like the concept and the abrupt finish. I understand 1000 words isn't a lot to work with but I felt that some places lacked...
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Clover had never had to share before. Amanda was at least ten years older than them, but she never let her age slip during the brief conversations...
@wizard She's in her past body. @bremen. Thank you as always :D
The Caitlyn girl seems intriguing :3 I found two grammar mistakes but on the whole it was great in that regard.
^ god I never thought of that My chapters are kinda heavy tho so I'll just have to water them down a bit. Thanks I completely forgot about...
Oh and by the way is six word doc-ument pages enough for a real life chapter?
And I updated Iris not that anyone cares :D
Btw in chapter three it's "Iris could have laughed if the circu mstances were different" Idk why they consider it profanity.
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C4 Clover sat on the hard concrete floor with her head in her hands. She hated new people. Not so long ago it had just been her and Peony, and...
Why oh WHY is doc ument censored? Yes, I bypassed. Call the cops
If anyone is looking for a story to read could you please read Iris? It's the equivalent of 12 word document pages so far and if you could leave...
Constructive criticism: ~Grammar "Blah blah blah He's on way here I hear. • did you mean on THE way? :/ • secondly, there should be a " at the...
Thank you to everyone who commented I have made a note of your recommendations. Update up but I hate it. Please comment! It really motivates me...