Separate names with a comma.
Mostly grammar is my largest observation for improvement however the plot seems like it could be very interesting. You may want to have a bit more...
Background could use more description, as said. Also check your tensest grammar and spelling but those are minor things. Story so far sounds good!
More :) still been writing even though I couldn't figure out why I couldn't post. Chapter 7 The hallway was clear. I double checked as I...
Sorry it took so long! But figured out the problem! Here's Chapter 6, much more coming later now that the problem's fixed Chapter 6 A rush of...
Still can't post... Have tons written- I'll get it up tonight hopefully.
Nope... I'll post it all when I get it to work... Sorry :(
Hmmm... Didn't post, let me try again... Chapter 6 A rush of cold air hit my face passing through the theater doors. Jess was doing tickets...
Enjoy! Chapter 6 A rush of cold air hit my face passing through the theater doors. Jess was doing tickets today and with a quick nod from me,...
Here you go, sorry for so late. Spent awhile working on this. I'm thinking of making a Feedback/Idea/Update thread, I'll see. Feedback is always...
Very much agreed with.
Here you go, sorry for delay. Open to ideas or characters if you have any. Next one should be out soon. Chapter 4 "Alright, listen up...
Sorry about Jade's last name. Didn't notice but autocorrect changed in it Chapter 2. Should be 'Helm' not 'Hilly'
I have a more graphic Prologue if anyone wants it. I'll post if I get requests. It's a bit more in depth on the death but I wasn't sure if people...
I'm seconding Cheesemuffin on this. I do believe characters shape a story, not create one. You need even something for the characters to go one....
Re: Characters Needed! Name: Kale Age: 15-19 depends on story Height: 5'9" Weight: 160 Lbs Weapons: Magic Class: Mage/Wizard Abilities: Sharp...
Thanks! More today. Hard to make her sound human yet undisturbed by killing.
Name: Joey Age: 19 Height: 5'5" Weight: 100 lbs Hair: Blond, one part pulled back the rest loose. Shoulder length Eyes: Hazel Personality: Soft...
If still lookin... Name: Adrian Age: 17 Height: 5'11" Weight: 180 lbs, muscle Hair: Black, Short and wavy Eyes: Green Weapon: Glaive. 5.5 foot...
Tell me how you like this. I don't know if I did a good enough job on her acting. Tell me if I should rewrite it and I will. Enjoy!! Chapter 2...
She may. :)