Separate names with a comma.
No pun intended
Hmmm... A cliché ending... Big surprise
Lolz
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Oooh! My character is EVIL!
Name: Yifae Race: Hafling (dark-elf and human) Class: Mage Weapon: An obsidian staff with strange symbols written in gold twisting around it, they...
Kingdom name: Ayyseu (ah-ee-see-uh) Kingdom Ruler: Aika Ayy Kingdom Philosophy: The kingdom of Ayyseu is stunningly matriarchal. It posseses a...
Okay if its not used thats fine i know how hard it is to fit everyone in!
Not as rhythmic as your other one, but other wise good
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I'm not trying to break her down arimay... No need to get your panties in a twist. You must be able to listen to constructive criticism. If you...
Hmm... Only asking for nice comments? You'll never improve. Also NEVER bump a story unless it's at least on the 3rd page...
Interesting concept. However you may want to divide it into chapters to organize it more. And the plot should begin to appear by now.