Hey bjorn, i think this stuff is pretty cool great work! Alsoooooo I posted a thing in your signups thread, sooooooo yeah and, to be honest, you have a lotta general language errors, you may wanna try to rerereread it a few times and make sure it's perfect before you post em that may be why iwrote or iwrite or whoever didn't really like your story. If you need any help with editing at all or for more ideas or if you have questions about obscure grammar or words, I'd be happy to help yeh out keep up the great work, because you'll only get better!
Found it! Cool story so far looks like everyone was excited to contribute characters too. Liked how each chapter was a different character. Notice how they all seem to end up running away to sort of save themselves... Sorry for long post and good luck!