(There is no feedback thread for this. Reply with how you think.) Chapter One I sprinted away from the man, my paws hitting the soft leaves. Swiftly turning, I climbed a tall birch tree and watched the man run past me. I jumped down and ran the other direction from the fool. My name is Makina Waltz. And I am a Lunki. A Lunki is a creature who can turn into anything. I aquired this power from the last dying Lunki. My enemy? The Venas. Venas are like transparent lions. Their teeth are poisonous, and sharp. But they can take the form of a human. I learned this all from a dying Lunki. I arrived home. Luckily, my parents were not home. I quickly turned back to myself. Long brown hair. Peach skin. Teal eyes. I finished transforming, and ran upstairs to finish some homework. I still had a school life, and wanted to finish my essay. As I tried to figure out the answer to 1,385 ÷ 345, I heard a voice in my head. Help… Before it's too late… Help me… I realized I probably wasn't alone.
Nice job, sis. Make the chapters longer though. I might be posting my own story tonight. Get ready for magic, guys. XD
Chapter Two I had a headache all night. Just those same words, reapeating themselves. In the morning, It was a pretty sunny Saturday. I told my parents I was going for a walk. I then ran to the backyard and turned into a fly. I would be less likely to be noticed. As I flew through the neighborhood, I kept on hearing the voice. Help me… I shook it off and decided to try to figure out where it was coming from. After all, you never know if it was another Lunki. But then again, it could be a Vena. I flew over the streets. It seemed to get louder and louder. Please… Before it's too late…. My headache was getting worse. I decided to hurry up before it got really bad. I flew through a vent leading to the sewers. Here, it was quite loud. And my head hurt more than ever. [/b]HELP…[/b]. Following it, I turned a corner, and there sat a trapped dragon. It spoke to me. "Who are you?", it asked in a low voice. I then said I was a Lunki. A good person. He then said three words I never expected: "I am too." I passed out in the form of a fly.
I don't know, i feel like there's a lot more telling than showing. It is a good idea though, plotwise.