"Is it time already?!" The man said, The other one,Peter, was furiously drumming his fingers on the oak post."Will you stop complaining you nugget-head!" Peter cried. The other man, Tom, had been a pain in Peters life. Peter was a hamdsome boy with blonde hair, blue eyes. You could see the girls flirted with him every time he smiled. Tom was different. He had always been jealous of his looks and had, in turn, made his life a misery. Peter could not remember how many times he had backchatted him in lessons, ruined the mood in his best jokes and blamed everything on him."Ohhhhhhh pp-leeeaaaaase, we stand here nearly everyday because of your wrong desicions" Tom said with a smirk."No Tom, that brain of yours thought it was a good idea to blame ME about putting a slug in Bettes pencil case…oh wait YOU DON'T EVEN HAVE A BRAIN!" He yelled. "Then i wonder who did it?" he smiled."In two minutes im gonna punch of your di-". His eyes glowed green… To Be Continued
Sorry for not writing anything : Chapter 1 2500 These years were harsh, Humans were barely standing anymore. The great civilizations of earth had been destroyed by the humans themselves. A sickness that ravaged the earth had been carefully designed in the bases of the Sahara. It was designed for biological warfare to destroy wars altogether. It destroyed wars… and humans! People tried to find the answer to this complex problem. In 2594 they found it…
Caine don't talk about not putting effort into stories. OP it isn't terrible just needs to be worked on.
Chapter 1 (continued) Routine scouting ship under the name of 'F1R3 F0X", was on a scouting mission in search of a large ship which had been missing for sometime. What they found was an asteroid on a wierd course. Its move patterns were odd and unusual. They were able to trace the course to an , until then, undiscovered planet. The planet was filled with water which is essential for life. It looked lush and green just like earth… used to be. This great news was immediatly sent to earth in hope of a large reward. What they did'nt know was there was a deep secret hidden on this mysterious planet
Caine stop being a dick. At least he doesn't make 8 threads to put his crap into. And btw his crap isn't crap, because we can actually understand his crap.
Chapter 2 "Sir!" Shouted the young soldier as he burst into the room. "What now? Pixies invaded the ship" The director said with a sigh. "No sir its ama-" WILL YOU SHUT THE HE** UP! Im doing a massive report here!" He interrupted with a shout. The scared man quickly walked out of the room into the corridor, His friend ,Vincent, was waiting there. "Told you he'd be ratty" he whispered with a snort. They walked down the corridor to the lift. As Mikey ,Vincent's, friend punched the numbers on the keypad, he ravaged on how they should go to that mysterious planet they had found , and leave everyone else behind. "How would we populate it?" Vincent said with a smirk. "I don't know…get a few babes or get one of those cloning machines." "I like your first suggestion… the cloning machine has no fun in it" As the doors opened Vincent and Mikey gasped. There stood Peter…
I honestly have no idea what is happening in your story. There is a vague sense of a plot, but it seems to skip over massive details and descriptions and huge gaps in time. Even if you write just a little each day, try gathering it all day by day until you have enough to post a chapter, not just a paragraph. Just my two cents about this