Ummm, I wrote a story, the stone eye, a couple days ago, could some one read it and give me an opinion? Please?
More male thoughts. Also, actually have him mention his gender in his thoughts. Feminine thoughts are easy to identify, male, not so much.
The character is a little bit too eccentric; not necessarily a bad thing, but can still cause problems. He also seems to faint a lot, even though I think I would too... But just write it a different way... Not plain out, "Then I fainted," it seems to feminine. (Not trying to be sexist here.... >.>)
I think I'll be posting the beginnings of a short story here soon. It's going to be about a zombie type theme... Though you'll have to figure out where it's from. Gamers should have no problem. Hint: Necromorphs.