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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by cheesemuffin, Sep 23, 2012.

  1. Greetings, slave readers!
    Leave all your critiques, questions, and theories here!
    Seriously, say what you think will happen next. It helps me a lot with not thinking of new plot elements.
     
  2. My eyes were yellow and green, not my hair. :lol: I like it anyways. Sounds just like me. =P
     
  3. Shh. Eyes and hair are the same thing, right?

    Right?
     
  4. Well.

    After several re-reads, I think it would have been much better if I hadn't fallen asleep four minutes before you posted.

    As for theories, maybe Cheese will actually explain something to poor Stora.
     
  5. Cheese gonna appear in your house and eat all your food ;)
     
  6. NUUUU I LUV MY CHEESE. Anyway seems good kill stora off though, just to annoy her.
     
  7. Yes. Because I'll certainly kill a character I just introduced, in the first few paragraphs.

    Mhmm. Yep. That's what I'll do. Yeah. Good plan.
     
  8. :lol: My suggestion:

    The chaos of forums today. Somehow work it in, like how it's ruled by noobs and the trolls are nearly extinct. Or the hugw thing that happened with Yarmes, iG, ect. Or ASW2012
     
  9. I don't know what any of that is... o_O
     
  10. I'm not in on the first chapter!?
    Outrageous, clearly Cheese cares not for my feelings.
    Boo hoo hoo.

    But seriously, you've made me furious with anticipation, GJ.
     
  11. I don't pay attention to ASW and Yarmes and iG.
     
  12. Who is Yarmes?
     
  13. An old mod who flipped out, silenced all of iG, all the mods, then quit and made a huge spectacle.
     
  14. Waah you guys are so mean! Thinking of killing me off and it's only the first chapter :'(

    Anyway great stuff cheese! I wasn't expecting the memory loss thing.
     
  15. I need to pay attention more...
     
  16. It was all over forums for a week. :lol:
     
  17. Seriously!?