Rise of the Blitzhawken Discussion

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011.

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  1. Please give me some feedback or some ideas for what's to come next
    Negative or positive, both are welcome
     
    #1 KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011
  2. Before I really only edited on grammar. So I have to tell you now that it looks like your setting up a good plot. As I've said many times before, and will say many times again:

    Interesting.

    Also...

    MOAR!
     
    #2 *Irin (01), Sep 5, 2011
  3. O haha, now i remember u, kyle. U were in iwrite co., right?
     
    #3 Marodo, Sep 5, 2011
  4. To tell you the truth im making this shat on the fly I puked up that chapter while I was on the toilet
     
    #4 KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011
  5. Yes I was
     
    #5 KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011
  6. O and very nice beginnig, it could use a bit more description and setting, but otherwise, very nice
     
    #6 Marodo, Sep 5, 2011
  7. Oh wow. iWrite. Brings back memories... I think I was an editor, but I'm not sure...
     
    #7 *Irin (01), Sep 5, 2011
  8. I was the co-president and co-founder with bastion
     
    #8 Marodo, Sep 5, 2011
  9. @marodo
    I'll keep that in mind for chapter 2, which will most definitely be full of action
     
    #9 KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011
  10. Thx for taking my advice, i liked the suspense tho, i did that with my story.
     
    #10 Marodo, Sep 5, 2011
  11. Wat are your opinions on an database for my stories that way everyone can have a general knowledge about sone of the terms
     
    #11 KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011
  12. Greatt so Farr can't wait for moree:)
     
    #12 *babygurl2112 (01), Sep 5, 2011
  13. Btw I would like to give Irin some credit, for she helped fix my grammar, made bland text pretty, and gave me some great advice
     
    #13 KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011
  14. Pew pew!

    I haz be shotted the approval laz0r!
     
    #14 cheesemuffin, Sep 5, 2011
  15. Aww, thanks Kyle, but you put together everything else.

    A database might be good, but it might be better if you just explained as you went on. In the "Showing, not telling," kind of way.
     
    #15 *Irin (01), Sep 5, 2011
  16. It would Be more of an encyclopedia
     
    #16 KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011
  17. It's awesome
     
    #17 Eaglestar, Sep 5, 2011
  18. Ty eagle
     
    #18 KyleBrowning, Sep 5, 2011
  19. Really interesting story, I like that you put in Alyssa ๎• I haven't found any mistakes so far, can't wait for the next chapter!
     
    #19 *OkamiAmaterasu (01), Sep 5, 2011
  20. I like it๎€Ž
     
    #20 *IRONhulk (01), Sep 5, 2011
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