oh woe is me

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Storallelite, Apr 1, 2011.

  1. Oh woe is me-A poem by Storallelite

    The smell of death clings to the air
    Fast approaching, spreading, everywhere.
    Stand alone, tall and strong.
    Oh woe is me, who is left alone.

    Empty streets go on and on,
    Stretching endlessly for all I can tell.
    Broken windows pile up,
    Oh woe is me, who is left alone.

    Cold seeps through my worn out coat,
    Wind tosses my hair in front of my face.
    The empty homes tower over me, causing shadows,giving me creeps.
    When will this nightmare end?
    Oh woe is me, who is left behind.


    This is sorta inspired by the Great depression. I was reading about it earlier tell me what you think on this thread thanks
     
  2. I like it! It has a very strong meaning to it. The wording seems to convey the feelings of the homeless people in the Great Depression
     
  3. Thanks! I really like writing poems but I never posted/showed anyone my poems so I wasn't sure if I was good or not
     
  4. I would recommend that you use "casting shadows" instead of "causing shadows".
     
  5. Great poam but I would recommend making each line in a verse the same long
     
  6. I love it! It's really good Stora!
     
  7. @memories and webs Thanks for the suggestions I'll keep them in mind :)
    @lady Really?....YAY!!
     
  8.  awesome stor. 10 points
     
  9. hey Spottedleaf

    Nice poem Stora
     
  10. Thankyou distance and hotrod