The Writer's Café

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Irin (01), Jul 20, 2010.

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    That's a basic character summary.

    Also, Please:
    1. Don't spam
    2. 3rd person story writing style
    3. Absolutely no OP

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    You may need to ask Irin before joining.

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    By OP I mean overpowered;

    invulnerability, superweapons, total advantages over all players, All of that in any form gets very annoying.
     
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    Over powering??
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    I'm :Burningclaw:
    This rouge Is again found In a bad situation. Armed with nothing but plait armor,a scythe ,and his gauntlets with glowing black claws, he is ready to fight anyone, and anyone he will fight. His strenth is his power.His Plaited armor is up to th ears showing only the look of his scared.
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    I ment
    *scared face.
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  7. Keegan just finished his book, and proudly is showing sydney
            The Cyber Wars
       Book 1: The Run of Destiny


    Prolouge:

    I woke up to the sound of the breakfast bell. There was no light in our room, if you could call this dank disgusting hole a room. This was the moment Leo and I had been planning for 3 weeks. It was time to make our escape.

    * 3 weeks earlier *

    "Run! They're onto us!" I yelled frantically, sprinting as I did so. "Throw the last torch!" Ok, maybe setting the governor's house on fire took it a little too far.
    Note to self: dont run from the police while not looking forwards. I smacked into the guard's chest. He asked to read us our rights, But I already knew them. He took us to court, where we pleaded guilty. This was our 6th "offense" meaning a life sentence. They threw us in the hole of a jail, Burkland Metro Jail. 

    *Present Day*

    We heard the second Breakfast bell, meaning time for HSP* to eat. A guard shuffled in our cell, a tray in each hand. We raised our rocks and hit him in the head, knocking him out. We haddent, However, Accounted for his partner, whoraised the alarm. I picked up the unconscious guard's data card and cybersword. I immeadiatly engaged the second guard, knocking him unconscious with a simple strike to the head from the Stellalite ball on the hilt of my sword. I ran up to the terminal, gesturing for Leo to come. I handed Leo the data card, and he quickly scanned it and proceeded to hack the console and release all the other prisoners. We ran, and ran, and ran. At the exit, there was a band of 4 guards. All of the prisoners proceeded to trample the guards and run. Me and Leo headed a different direction, though. Instead of going "home" to that horrid adoption home, we ran to the forest, knowing we could never turn back.

    End Prolouge

    Chapter 1: The Lightning

    Me and Leo were still running, knowing if we stopped for 10 minutes the monsters would catch up. We were kinda P.O. d That he had underestimated us so much. I mean, Seriously, only Hounds? We would destroy tjem easily once we found a good defensive position. We ran, and ran, and ran.

    Chapter 2: Stornghold

    After we ran for about 3 hours, we came upon a old military base. We knew we could destroy most monsters here, provided we had a strategy.

    Chapter 3: My House

    We ran into the military camp. There was no apperent inhabatants, So we set up our defenses.
    Right as we finished, the HellHounds found us. We drew our swords. The leader of the pack lunged, the pack following. Leo cut his rope, spilling water all over them and dissolving the weakest. The strongest, however, kept coming. I cut my rope, dropping all of the metal we had found in the camp on them. Only one was left, and I quickly struck it's head with the handle of my sword. It went down, barely alive. I put a shock collar on it, then tended to it's wounds. I knew it could not kill us... yet.

    End of book 1; book 2: the twins is coming soon
     
  8.         The Cyber Wars
       Book 1: The Run of Destiny


    Prolouge:

    I woke up to the sound of the breakfast bell. There was no light in our room, if you could call this dank disgusting hole a room. This was the moment Leo and I had been planning for 3 weeks. It was time to make our escape.

    * 3 weeks earlier *

    "Run! They're onto us!" I yelled frantically, sprinting as I did so. "Throw the last torch!" Ok, maybe setting the governor's house on fire took it a little too far.
    Note to self: dont run from the police while not looking forwards. I smacked into the guard's chest. He asked to read us our rights, But I already knew them. He took us to court, where we pleaded guilty. This was our 6th "offense" meaning a life sentence. They threw us in the hole of a jail, Burkland Metro Jail. 

    *Present Day*

    We heard the second Breakfast bell, meaning time for HSP* to eat. A guard shuffled in our cell, a tray in each hand. We raised our rocks and hit him in the head, knocking him out. We haddent, However, Accounted for his partner, whoraised the alarm. I picked up the unconscious guard's data card and cybersword. I immeadiatly engaged the second guard, knocking him unconscious with a simple strike to the head from the Stellalite ball on the hilt of my sword. I ran up to the terminal, gesturing for Leo to come. I handed Leo the data card, and he quickly scanned it and proceeded to hack the console and release all the other prisoners. We ran, and ran, and ran. At the exit, there was a band of 4 guards. All of the prisoners proceeded to trample the guards and run. Me and Leo headed a different direction, though. Instead of going "home" to that horrid adoption home, we ran to the forest, knowing we could never turn back.

    End Prolouge

    Chapter 1: The Lightning

    Me and Leo were still running, knowing if we stopped for 10 minutes the monsters would catch up. We were kinda P.O. d That he had underestimated us so much. I mean, Seriously, only Hounds? We would destroy tjem easily once we found a good defensive position. We ran, and ran, and ran.

    Chapter 2: Stornghold

    After we ran for about 3 hours, we came upon a old military base. We knew we could destroy most monsters here, provided we had a strategy.

    Chapter 3: My House

    We ran into the military camp. There was no apperent inhabatants, So we set up our defenses.
    Right as we finished, the HellHounds found us. We drew our swords. The leader of the pack lunged, the pack following. Leo cut his rope, spilling water all over them and dissolving the weakest. The strongest, however, kept coming. I cut my rope, dropping all of the metal we had found in the camp on them. Only one was left, and I quickly struck it's head with the handle of my sword. It went down, barely alive. I put a shock collar on it, then tended to it's wounds. I knew it could not kill us... yet.

    End of book 1; book 2: the twins is coming soon
     
  9. "So Kegeen is your name? Your story sounds good!" compliments Sydney
     
  10. thankyou! says keegan "I wonder... Do you write too?"
     
  11. my computer alt glyikersdoom is continuing my story
    i cant type fast pn ipod
     
  12. "I write a little. My stories don't really turn out that well but it's fun to write them" said Sydney.
     
  13. im his alt :) ok ima type my story

    Cyber Wars 2: The Twins

    Table of contents: Chapter one: Unwelcome Guests
    Chapter 2: MONSTERS
    Chapter 3: No More
    End Table o contents

    Chapter 1: Unwelcome Guests

    When me and Leo woke up, it wasn't even sunrise. We hadn't slept an hour. We heard a rustling, and 3 heads poked out of another tent. We walked over and questioned the newcomers. they said their names were Ravyn and The Twins. They too had been HSPs , and had ran behind us.
    We hadn't seen their types of weapons before, so we asked and they were top secret prototypes. They're supposedly archers. That seems fine, as me and Leo are both close combat types. But. We heard a couple of rattling noises, and knew it was time to fight.

    Chapter 2: Ravyn and The twins

    The Rattlers came out of the forest quickly, their tongues flashing with the glint of high-tech poison.
    Ravyn tried to shoot them, but because they were so fast she only picked off 2 of them. to make matters worse, they were the hydra genus and 2 Sprouted from the dead bodies. I immeadiatly chopped there heads off and cut the bodies into little pieces so they couldn't multiply. There was still about 6 left, and Leo got 4 with his throwing stars. But then, a Rattler we didn't see came up behind him. It bit his leg, turning him green. We knew he only had 2 days to live from the color of his face. I went into a killing frenzy, destroying every snake(and half the camp) in my rage over Leo's certain death. We immediatly ran . We knew there was almost no hope for Leo, so we must find the GrongleBerry bush before it was too late.

    Chapter 3: No More

    We Ran, the twins supporting Leo, Until we finally found a GrongleBerry bush. We imeadiatly shook it for berries, but there was no more. No more berries meant no more Leo. I wept until I had no more tears to shed. but then... I spotted 2 GrongleBerries on the ground. I knew that would barely be enough, but it would have to do. I shoved them in my mouth and crushed them with my gums until the skin came off. I dropped the berries and juice onto Leo's wound. His face turned pink, and he woke up. We cheered loudly, and Leo got up. We knew it wasn't over, however
    End
     
  14. Guys this is what I have of my first book.

    Hells rising
    My name is Patrick, my life basically ended when he returned...His name was Phillip he was my freind until today.The day started out as a normal day, I got dressed and walked to the bus. As usual I got on, but somthing was different. My freind all said :Hi are you the new student?I countered :No I know all of you stop messing around.
    "we don't know you."
    "but I know all of you"
    Then I list there names, and that is when my life changed for good...
     
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    Walks into the cafe.
     
  16. Almost done with book 1:

    Hells rising
    My name is Patrick, my life basically ended when he returned...His name was Phillip he was my freind until today.The day started out as a normal day, I got dressed and walked to the bus. As usual I got on, but somthing was different. My freind all said :Hi are you the new student?I countered :No I know all of you stop messing around.
    "we don't know you."
    "but I know all of you"
    Then I list there names, and that is when my life changed for good...

    Ch.2
    The roof of the bus was torn of by what looked like a chicken with a bad hair due. But no one appeared to see, I was taken aback. The thing appeared to have three eyes all red, glaring right at me. I tried to not look so it wouldn't see that it was me, but as if it could read my mind like a book, it swooped down and grabbed me. I could think of a million things I would rather due then be lifted out of my bus bye a over grown chicken.

    Ch.3 
    Oh god I thought why is it always me, I get bullied, I have my homework stolen, I get kidnaped by a chicken,A CHICKEN of all the things a chicken. Wait...Its a harpy. We flew every where, but we stopped, and the harpy got someone else...Oh my lord I thought as I recognize my x-best friend Philip...He flailed and screamed as we got closer to our target. We where going to the grand canyon. When we arrived we were brutally dropped. As we free fell I felt lighter as we neared the floor. 

    Ch.4
    When we hit the floor I felt dead, but I felt like I was still falling. Maybe after you die u feel the same way for eternity,but this time we hit water, or what seemed to be water it was warm and thick. I thought I was going to pass out when I learned what it was. It was blood, blood of the ones lost here. I saw a skull then I saw Phillip lying on the ground. I was the lucky one, Phillip was dead...
     
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    Walks in the cafe
    "hey anyone in here"