Picking up the Pieces - FEEDBACK

THIS IS AMAZING MAKE ANOTHER NOW

 

Its done?

 

I thought it was really good. Confusing somewhat. In a good way

 

Confuzzling but good

 

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A little confusing at first xD

Definitely interesting and catches the eye. I like how you use the computer sequences to separate parts, very original.

Keep it up Bremen 

 

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Elaborate more on the infected. What were te creatres in the beginning? What was on the other side of the door? And how infected is infected if its at all beleivable that his parents could have been? Find a way to tell this without blurping out. Other than that, it's really good

 

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. You should advertise in the writers cafe..

 

Hmm, interesting. I'd have to say that it keeps my interest, and I like how so far you've avoided mentioning the main character's name.