“The strength of an empire is not in the people and their rights, but in those who rule It.” the cold voice echoed throughout the factory. “The people should be grateful that a strong ruler has come,” repeated the masses tonelessly, “All hail our lord Yakarr, ruler of our great and prosperous land.” and then they returned to work. I sighed silently to myself as my companions and I assembled the various items. I was surrounded by little more than flesh and blood robots hour after hour, week after week. Hundreds of people, and not an original thought between them. Not that it was their fault. A little preview to my story. The thread is called Free Will- A Warning Okay, I know this used to be the Labyrinth feedback forum but I changed it to save the space of bumping all these threads. Here are all the stories I've ever posted on Fan Fiction. The one I posted before Fan Fiction was deleted accidentally so I don't have it. I also didn't like it much. Please browse below. I will note that the favorite of most people tends to be No Longer Human, but it's your choice. If you wish to post feedback, post it here, and tell me which story you are tallking about. I am open to constructive critisism, and if you hated it please tell me why. I am always looking to imrove my writing abilities. I must note that.... Character making is CLOSED for ALL STORIES!!! Anyone posting a character for any will be ignored, mostly because all but FW-aW are finished. The Labyrinth: Unfinished Here _______________________________________________________________________________________ If you wish to read about the Shnedae vs Ter'iot/ Ma'uibo war I have written two other stories about the Syndicate of Nymnid and the Ter'iot. The links are below. The Dark Army This story is about the Ter'iot side of the story and its main character is named Velene Orsiko Before Betrayal This is kind of a prequel to The Dark Army and the main character's name is Celiana. This takes place in Ymni Castle, the home of The Syndicate of Nymnid If you read them and wish to post feedback, post here. I believe it is best to read the Dark Army before Before Betrayal, but it's up to you. Note: I will be editing both very soon by the end of the weekend, so I'd wait until then to read them, however if you wish to see the original versions, you are free to look. The Labyrinth is a completely different series, so you don't really need to read the Dark Army series before you read this one. ________________________________________________________________________________________ Some other writing by me (if you wish to read it) would be my stories No Longer Human, and Light Casts Shadows. No Longer Human No Longer Human is a story about a bunch of children with special powers that are trapped in a dome to save them from normal humans who wish to kill them. Trouble insues when a guy called Avenger shows up and begins to speak about breaking down the dome and taking revenge on normals. Note: This one tends to be a favorite, and I may be writing a sequel soon. Please give me your opinion on whether or not I should continue it, or just leave it untouched and why. Thanks :lol: Light Casts Shadows Light Casts Shadows is a short story, only one post long. I can't really give you a summary without giving away the whole thing so... Sorry Note: I'm not writing these here to force you to read them, I'm writing these here so I don't have to keep bumping the threads and that way I'll save space on Active Topics. Thank you for reading, or ignoring, whatever is your choosing.
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Rouge name- garth personalaty (sorry spellin) - sly an devious isnt much of a fighter but loyal for money Looks- smooth face except for a gash over left eye is fairly small and thin not much in the way of muscle (
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Sorry forgot weps weapons- has two long daggers an a pounch of throwing knives
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Name: Jude Age: 21 Gender: Male Class?: Warrior Weapon: Long sword and a dagger. Appearance: short brown hair, 5'11, tan skin, athletic build. Personality: He is charming and has a swagger about him. He is not quick to anger but won't back down from a fight if someone wrongs him.
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Well then copy what you wrote, hit cancel, look at what I wanted, then hit reply again and write some more! Repeat as many times as necessary
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Name: Charlie Age: 15 Gender: Male Class: Rouge Weapon: Small daggers can be used as throwing knives Apperance: Scar arcoss back and on arm Personality: Efficient but Cationus
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Name: Amanda age: 15 gender: girl class: rogue wepons: two long sword appearance: chin length dirty blond hair, dark blue eyes. Dresses like a tomboy. Personality: very pesimistic, smart alc, know it all, loves to win, hates to loose. Enjoys arguing because she normally wins, also enjoys confusing people with her 'superior' intelligence.
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Name: Crolen Gender: Male Age: 13 Class: Rogue Appearance: Tall, with bloodred eyes that pierce the darkness. Black hair helps him camouflage. Weapon: Massive Longbow that never appears to be in sight. Weakness. He doesn't do well with people. Scratch that, he sucks at social things. Skill: Shootin with accuracy, and hiding. Physical Weakness: Strength Has never really met anyone.
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Personality: Silent. He doesn't know what to say, or really, he doesn't know how to speak English.
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback It's ok FW. It's right under the one before it i just hate it wen they're on 2 different pages!
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback OOOOOOMG! :O Name: Deileon Age: 17 Gender: Male Class: Warrior Weapon: Claymore Appearance: Red-haired (long), blue eyed, pale-skinned. Pretty buff, and tall-ish. Personality: Deileon's a total jerk. He's mean, pretty obnoxious, and always sarcastic. He also tries to make jokes. XD Yaha, I hope it's alright! He's a pretty weird character, I dunno if he'd even work... ^_^
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Post until the story starts. Out of all the bios I receive, I will pick 2-4 to be main characters. The rest will either be disregarded or put in as minors. By all means, post!